Topic sentence: Jack and Gwendolyn have a very cautious and formal relationship with each other, and Wilde is using this as an example of most Victorian Era relationships.
Transition/point #1:
an example of this.../formality, politeness
CD: "You're quite perfect, Miss Fairfax!" -Jack, p 38
Transition/point #1:
an example of this.../formality, politeness
CD: "You're quite perfect, Miss Fairfax!" -Jack, p 38
CM1: very formal, talk using high diction
CM2: polite to each other, very complementary
Transition/point #2:
this shows how.../cautiousness, unsure about their love towards each other
CD: ""Do you really love me, Gwendolyn?" -Jack, p 39
CM2: polite to each other, very complementary
Transition/point #2:
this shows how.../cautiousness, unsure about their love towards each other
CD: ""Do you really love me, Gwendolyn?" -Jack, p 39
CM1: slightly unsure about whether they really love each other
CM2: this makes them very cautious, at to not offend anyone
Transition/point #3:
Wilde's point by showing this is.../satire, demonstrative of all Victorian relationships
CD: "I mean we must be married at once; there is no time to be lost." -Jack, p 42
CM1: suddenly they become wanting to be married the moment they are sure of each others' love
CM2: Wilde uses satire and saying that all relationships were like that during the Victorian Era
Concluding sentence/Transition to next paragraph:
Jack's unknown brother, Algernon, is in a much different type of relationship with Jack's ward, and Wilde again uses satire in their relationship.
So there it is, and Josh, you can start off your paragraph based on my conclusion, or tell me what is wrong with it, and either of you can give suggestions. please!
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ReplyDeleteI like how your commentary supports the thesis,referring to the way they talk and behave toward each other, which directly connects to our thesis of how all of the relationships connect to expose a broader view of the different types of human attraction. You should try to put creative words and phrases into your transitions to seperate from ours, while still referring to the thesis. Great Job!!
ReplyDeleteYour conclusion ties well into Josh's paragraph and your points seem to be well described. Make sure that your commentaries aren't repetitive and bring up new ideas. Other than that it looks good.
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